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Alternate Future (part 3)

on Mon Nov 01, 2010 12:50 pm
The Firestorm fired all out into the opposing ships, along with the Dissidents. In about 10 seconds, the Imperial ships fired back. Dissident ships, already damaged, began to fall first, however they managed to destroy 32 Imperial ships before the last Dissident ship exploded.

"Sir, our allies are dead and we need help. What should we do?"
"Evasive Maneuvers, keep firing all cannons. Launch fighters and ready escape pods. We're not about to blow up like the Indestructible did, not if I can help it."

The Imperial ships all suddenly ceased firing.

"Sir we're being hailed."
"Surrender immediately and you will be permitted to live. Fight, and you will die."
The commander showed them the finger and the officers on bridge took that as their cue to resume fire on the Imperial ships.

The Imperial ships all rained death on the Firestorm, which fired back, lasers cutting devastating arcs through hulls, nukes exploding violently as they struck the Imperial ships.

"Sir, two more ships approaching. It's the Bullseye and Andromeda, sir."
"Tell them to raise shields and prepare for battle upon arrival."

The two ships fired main cannons quickly into the remains of the Imperial Fleet, once near a hundred, now about twenty. Within a matter of minutes, the fleet was nothing but a single ship, heavily damaged.

"Sir, were being hailed"
"We will come for earth next, and when we come, we will wreak terrible havoc upon you all."
"Sir they're self-destructing and flying at us"
"Shoot to kill!"

The alien ship exploded, whether due to either nukes or the self destruct, no one was sure.

"Take us back to Earth."
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Mon Nov 01, 2010 12:51 pm
Also:Happy Halloween
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Tue Nov 02, 2010 5:57 pm
This is getting more fun kill more random ships Very Happy
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Wed Nov 03, 2010 9:59 am
dont worry part 4 will have even bigger explosions
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Thu Nov 04, 2010 2:48 am
ohh thats good cool pirat
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Thu Nov 04, 2010 12:22 pm
a certain moon is going to blow up...
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Thu Nov 04, 2010 11:13 pm
Depending how active, this becomes, i may or may not give your own sub-forum for this.

for some CnC

i like the plot, but you need to be more detailed in your writing, You can't just say there's a bunch of ships firing Nukes and lasers. And when you start battling, i find it hard to know who's getting blown up.

if your have writing/learning difficulties (like moi) then i applaud you on this, if not then you can defo do more improve this.
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Fri Nov 05, 2010 8:41 am
ok i will try to improve on that.
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Fri Nov 05, 2010 8:42 am
I think i will try to write one every weekend
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Fri Nov 05, 2010 8:14 pm
Please don't double post, just edit your posts.
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Mon Dec 20, 2010 6:44 pm
haha a military oficer unles facing immenet death face to face probs wouldnt give asomone the finger, but yer once agen good short bit of writing, but i agree with vedic needs more detail, and what universe is it? stargate, startrek or a your own?

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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Tue Dec 21, 2010 6:10 am
pretty much my own universe. I saw the human ships looking a lot like the stargate human ships, but thats pretty much it.
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Wed Dec 22, 2010 12:44 am
Skembri, WTF happened to your spelling, lol

Stargate ships were designed to be awesome.

Also, UnK if you need some one to proof read your Works just PM them tome before posting them.
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Wed Dec 22, 2010 3:32 am
Unk, PLEASE keep it all in one thread, there is no need to have 5 threads each saying (Part 1, Part 2,Part 3) that are only like 2 Paragraphs long, please have one threat for discussion, and one threat for the story.


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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Thu Dec 23, 2010 9:36 am
i haven't made a new thread for months, nor have i written anything in a while. I am not likely to write anything more.
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Re: Alternate Future (part 3)

on Thu Dec 23, 2010 2:27 pm
haha vedic i dunno, my spelling friggin failed tho aye, and unk its cool, i like the stargate ships designs


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