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Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:20 am
Captain John Anderson sat in the captains chair of the first Human Interstellar Battleship, the USS Indestructible. He took a look of the beautiful view of Alpha Centauri, which would later become the first human colony.

Lieutenant Johannson said, "Sir there is an unidentified craft coming up on sensors."
"Raise shields, arm lasers and ready nukes"
"Yes sir"

The unidentified ship flew onto the screen, directly in front of the Indestructible.

"Sir they are powering weapons and locking torpedoes onto us"
"Hail them."
"No response"

The ship suddenly shook as a laser cannon struck its sheilds.
"Shields at 83%, sir"
"Return Fire!"

Nukes and lasers flew from the Indestructible straight into theirs, passing straight through their shields and cleaving massive gashes into their ship. They opened a hyperspace window and flew towards it, but a final nuke struck their engines and their ship exploded into small splinters.
"Damage Report?"
"Minimal damage on all decks, shields down to 23%"
"Sir... I'm getting 3 more ships approaching our position, make that 5, 23, Sir we should get out of here immediately".
"Jump for earth"
"sir, hyperdrive is currently non-functional"
23 ships all surrounded the Indestructible, all arming weapons.
"We need to go, NOW"
"Its no good Captain!"
The other ships all fired. The Indestructible exploded with such a force that it destroyed 4 Alien ships. No escape pods had survived.
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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:27 am
somebody should give me feedback on this.


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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:29 am
nice but way to short and almost right away you blew up the main ship
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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:30 am
its not the main ship
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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:32 am
oh well still bit short and still good job
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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:32 am
ya well im kinda pressed for time atm
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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:33 am
oh ok
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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 9:43 am
dude cool but kinda agree with klingonking bit short but if you didnt have time make a second 1 when you do
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Re: Alternate Future

on Sun Oct 24, 2010 4:12 pm
Ya I will.
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Re: Alternate Future

on Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:21 am
Although they say its a bit short i have to disagree he put a good amount of detail in to make it good, and considering a ship already got blown up which makes it more fun Very Happy
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Re: Alternate Future

on Mon Oct 25, 2010 8:14 am
Thank you Smile
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Re: Alternate Future

on Tue Oct 26, 2010 10:12 am
Ok episode 2 coming out
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