Redemption Discussion

ok this is the Discussion thread for Redemption. An mini novel I'm making set in the Halo universe during the Covernats Civil War

Post here any thoughts and any advice on how to improve an chapter/episode/post

for some general knowledge about the Novel.
the Captain of the Ship is Ultra(rank of captain) Sha'Karr an Elite
He Commands an battleground of 2 CSS- cruisers and Captains An Reverence Class Cruiser.
he is An Elite many other Elites evny.

For any more info you''ll have to wait till i've finished the 1st part.

(Due to the fact I'm writing another story and 2 Rps, there both going on hold for quite a while)

its pretty cool i guess but iknow nothing about the halo series so yeh but it was pretty good

I'm currently writing up the second part, it will probably be done by midnight or sooner

i love the way i write a series everyone copies, and forgets to read mine, lol part 3 is released,

I was all ready writing several mini-stories before you started writing Earth lock.
I only started this one cause, I got hyped up about Halo

lol so read it

I read it an hour after you posted it.

oh ok lol, yer your series is good, we cud team up write a ful on novel, from scratch and sell it lol

lol I'm not that good

exactly, but we have different writting styles so it could turn out ghoood

well i do like the idea, but not sure how'd we do it

we start from scratch, design everything, each charater, we write a profile for them, we design the tech and profile the, planets, races, ships, governments, then we write a basic history, then we start off from the time of that history and like do a bit from then, then we skip towhen our novels set and we do a chapter each then swap and we like addmore detail, focus in more combat and change it, and then we swap back, and we go onto the next chapters, or sumin

I like the idea, How about the Timocratic states of [insert race here]
google Timoracy and it's the military themed one not landlord

urm personally no, and tey wodnt be states if its a sci fi, but we could do this, the the military regime of human nations or sumin

enemy could be the united collection of Dra'ik lifeforms

random idea lol off the top of my head but u nooo

well can't be humans to original
but the government type of Timocracy is really ever used in Sci-0fi

thats cos it sounds gay, tbh, what it means is good but nobody really would know what it is, so a military regime is never used for humans and would work

perhaps, but yer if u really believe timocracy is the best way to go, just re-explain it cos wiki dint make alot of sence and ims ure we can use it

using an on-line dictionary
1. A state described by Plato as being governed on principles of honour and military glory.(this one)
2. An Aristotelian state in which civic honour or political power increases with the amount of property one owns.

ok lets develop different aspects, let me design and write a basic history

a few different ideas

and u develop and bio some characters, tech, ships or whatever, yer or whatt

you can design what they look like.. I kinda just fail at that on a epic scale