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Thu May 12, 2011 2:36 am
---Storyline---

A 23 year old Man called Alexander Jacobs goes on his first journey into space, he is a young commander, spending all his time in training and space flight and battle simulators. He has been given a chance to prove himself to his commanding officer. He is very determined to make it into space and he must not fail, or all 13 years of researching and training will have gone to waste. His brother who is only 4 years older than Alexander made it into deep space but never returned when he was signalled to, this mission was death threatening and Alexander feels the need to find his brother, knowing how big the universe is and how many years or even decades it could take to find his brother. He would not stop until he finds him. (Outline, he has lost his brother and has entered a space program in the hopes of reaching deep space and finding his brother, what is out there, may get in his way...)

Guys Please remember that I'm only 13 so this story won't be very long at all, and I'm just doing this for a school project but I'm going to do it here to get what you all think. If you have some suggestions or any modifications you want me too add I will add them when I can. so just post them below, and don't comment unless you have read through all of this.

---Chapter 1---

Alexander looked up at the great tall building, thinking to himself *How am I going to get this* He walks up to the door and presses a button to open it, as he walks in a man comes up to him and gives of a brief frown and then walks past him, "This place must not be a very happy place" He says to himself, as he turns to his left he sees the elevators and then he glares to his right and notices the reception desk. He walks up to the desk, attempting to look smart and useful, the lady asks him "Are you Alexander Jacobs?" Alexander looks at her and then to his hands "Yes, I am, I'm here for the job Interview" He claims as he speaks to her in a light soft voice. The woman looks at him oddly "You don't look like very good material for this job, but by all means, it's on the 45th floor" He looks to the elevators again, and starts to frown "Are there any stairs in this building Ma'am?" He asks her trying so hard not to sound stupid. She looks at him like he must be mental. "Yes, just go round the corner to your right and turn left, there will be a sign saying stairs, just follow it up." She says this to him in a hurry to pick up the ringing phone on the desk.

Alexander runs to the corner and turns left, he sees the stairs and starts to run up them. He pants as he reaches floor 20. "This isn't going to work12 He yells to himself as he runs up two more flights of stairs. He finally reaches floor 30 until he collapses ad falls to the wall "There must be some way to get up faster than this" He says to himself, starting to wish he had taken the busy elevators.



===To Be Continued===

(Can't be ******* bothered to finish it tonight so I'll do it tomorrow if I can.)
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Sun May 22, 2011 8:19 am
I'm guessing this won't be finished then?
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Mon May 23, 2011 5:34 pm
Will, when I have the time to do it, I have alot of stuff to organize and file on my computers and then my dad has been downloading shit on the big computer so I ahven't really got the time to get onto the forums often anymore.
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Sat May 28, 2011 1:08 am
CBA to read more than the synopsis, But the Whole 23 Year old Commander 13 years of Training/Research thing....

Firstly the rank of Commander is an High Rank, that you'll only like get when your in your Mid 30s, at the rank of Commander you'll be the XO of an ship (or the CO if it's an Small ship like an Corvette or Frigate. And there anit ever being an 23 year old Commander getting an Command Position.

you could Bump him down to Lt. Commander*, and make him the XO of said ship **...and some crap like that.

then there's the 13 years of Training/Research..... at the age of 10 he started training/Researching...Dout that.


Ok just read the actual Story.... uh.... Job?

For the story, (since it's an school project, you WANT it to be good), So instead of starting off at the very start. instead start on the ship..... just as it get attacked, then while he's drifting throw space... Flash back on how he got there, then he gets's picked up by Aliens Blah Blah blah..... Actually i might make a story like that...


* and a bit older.
** Assuming there is an "Said Ship"
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Wed Jun 01, 2011 5:46 pm
This is a good idea thanks vedic, I'll take it into account although I have already done the project hence why I didn't finish this. but I may use your idea.
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